Rise of the Immortal Black Dragon King

Let me know what you think of the story so far. Do you like it, or is there something you dislike? If I'm doing anything wrong or missing something, I could use your help in pointing it out since I can't always assess my own shortcomings. I'd appreciate it if you could take a few minutes to share your thoughts. Your feedback means a lot, and I hope to hear some honest replies. Tell me what you think about the story so far so I can keep improving. Thanks in advance, and once again, please take a few moments to comment and help me grow. I need it.